Hi guys - thought we could start a class shared writing! I will start if off and then someone else will continue. The things you have to remember are - 1. It has to make sense. 2. You must read to check that ALL punctuation is correct before publishing. 3. You can only write 4 sentences before it is someone else's turn to add on to the story. You are allowed to contribute at another time! Have fun. Who knows where our story will end!
I remember being a little scared of elevators when I was little because I thought that your toes might get sucked into the top if you didn't jump off properly and then one day . . .
. . . because while no one else yet knew why I was travelling up that elevator on that particularly bone-chilling winter's morning, I did. Even though, by this stage, the pain was travelling at lightning speed up my right leg I had to . . .
...And then the sword vanished and no-one ever saw it again... until one stormy night when a little girl was wandering around the now haunted hospital...
...The little girl was called Amelia. She was an orphan. No fosterers would take her in so she didn't know much. She walked into the Hospital not knowing what was about to Happen...
The sword came back and the shield was in her hand. Again she took over the world and the hospital she destroyed the remain and the world was hers. . .
Until one day when a little boy destroyed the sword. It was split into lots of pieces that was hidden around the world. Amelia cried for days on end. Then she went on a mission to find them as she loved that sword . . .
... Amelia headed to an Airport and got on her new private plane to her new HQ. When she got inside Amelia hoped into her Spaceship and used the little piece of the sword that she saved. Amelia put the piece into her intergalactic map and she set of to find the other pieces...
soon she was in the sahara desert and from there she found one of the five pieces of the sword.Then at that instant She knew was on the trail of the magic sword.
After a few hours in the desert Amelia felt as if she were going to fall over and a few minutes later, just as she predicted she fainted. When she awoke she found herself in a underground metal jail. But also the peices of her sword were gone, and there was not even a security guard to help her esape...
... A funny figure appeared in front of Amelia. It was wearing a tuxedo and it had a wrinkeled face and 3 long fingers. There was a spark infront of her then she blew up along with the sword. The sword turned turned into normal metal and Amelia was the only person who could turn the metal back into the magic sword but she blew up into dust...
But then a boy called matthew went to outer space to destroy the sword into a million pieces and that is how the sword got destroyed in the world and then the clones HQ got terminated and the lightsaber was never again seen. THE END!!!!!!
i saw it in my bedroom on mars because when you destroyed the earth it came onto mars and landed on my bed where i fownd it and used its full power to turn mars into a big heap of gummy bears and lolypops then an evil vilane came and turned the lollypops into lolypoops untill......
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Hi guys - thought we could start a class shared writing! I will start if off and then someone else will continue. The things you have to remember are -
ReplyDelete1. It has to make sense.
2. You must read to check that ALL punctuation is correct before publishing.
3. You can only write 4 sentences before it is someone else's turn to add on to the story. You are allowed to contribute at another time!
Have fun. Who knows where our story will end!
I remember being a little scared of elevators when I was little because I thought that your toes might get sucked into the top if you didn't jump off properly and then one day . . .
And then one day I didn't jump off properly. Mum followed me and when I looked at my feet I saw that I was missing a little toe.
ReplyDeleteBlood begun to pool around my foot onto the floor. What could I do, a crowd had formed around me. Where was mum.
ReplyDelete'MUM!" I screamed
Thanks for writing on our shared story page but can you please remember to use your name and not mine! Mrs Phelps
DeleteThere she is down there on the lower floor, "Mum"!
ReplyDeleteShe runs up and see's my foot. She screams. "Don't worry I'll call the ambulance.
Sirens roared, the crowd fell silent.Here comes the pain.
ReplyDelete"Ouch''.There goes the needle.''Hold my hand tight sweetie",Mum says.
ReplyDelete...Later at the hospital...
ReplyDelete" I have just called your dad he will be here soon" said mum. My foot was stinging with pain, but I knew I had to hold on...
. . . because while no one else yet knew why I was travelling up that elevator on that particularly bone-chilling winter's morning, I did. Even though, by this stage, the pain was travelling at lightning speed up my right leg I had to . . .
ReplyDeleteCut my leg off . . .
ReplyDelete...i was going to have to have robotic replacements
ReplyDeleteAs soon as i heard that i cried for 3 days and then i screamed. The day had come. . .
ReplyDelete...my leg was amputated then i resived a present i shaked the box it was metal...
ReplyDelete. . . It Was a magic sword. The Hospital lit up like the sun and the sword magically unwrapped itself from the box. . .
ReplyDelete...and destroyed the hospital i found a sheild next to it...
ReplyDelete...And then the sword vanished and no-one ever saw it again...
ReplyDeleteuntil one stormy night when a little girl was wandering around the now haunted hospital...
...The little girl was called Amelia. She was an orphan. No fosterers would take her in so she didn't know much. She walked into the Hospital not knowing what was about to Happen...
ReplyDelete. . . She sees something glowing in the darkness, then she risks a step forward. Lightning struck and thunder crackled. Where was Amelia . . .
ReplyDelete... She had disappered into the floor. Somebody or something had left a trap for her. What was it?
ReplyDeleteA dark spot in the distance, which was completely unknown. What was in it?
ReplyDeleteWas it some sort of monster? It came towards her and Amelia could see that it was a sword. It was floating, above the ground.
ReplyDelete"Ahhhhhhhh" what is it I ran my heart was beating out of my chest, it is my worst night mare.
ReplyDeleteThe sword came back and the shield was in her hand. Again she took over the world and the hospital she destroyed the remain and the world was hers. . .
ReplyDeleteUntil one day when a little boy destroyed the sword. It was split into lots of pieces that was hidden around the world. Amelia cried for days on end. Then she went on a mission to find them as she loved that sword . . .
ReplyDelete... Amelia headed to an Airport and got on her new private plane to her new HQ. When she got inside Amelia hoped into her Spaceship and used the little piece of the sword that she saved. Amelia put the piece into her intergalactic map and she set of to find the other pieces...
ReplyDeletesoon she was in the sahara desert and from there she found one of the five pieces of the sword.Then at that instant She knew was on the trail of the magic sword.
ReplyDelete... Then there was a funny trail in the sand. It was a sand snake!!! The Snake poped up but Amelia ran away before it could attack her...
ReplyDeleteAfter a few hours in the desert Amelia felt as if she were going to fall over and a few minutes later, just as she predicted she fainted. When she awoke she found herself in a underground metal jail. But also the peices of her sword were gone, and there was not even a security guard to help her esape...
ReplyDelete... A funny figure appeared in front of Amelia. It was wearing a tuxedo and it had a wrinkeled face and 3 long fingers. There was a spark infront of her then she blew up along with the sword. The sword turned turned into normal metal and Amelia was the only person who could turn the metal back into the magic sword but she blew up into dust...
ReplyDeleteThen ten years later the sword came back and it was more power full
ReplyDeleteThe little boys name was james he now had the magic sword and he reforged the world that was the end of his story...so begins another.........
ReplyDeletebut then the sword stayed there forever and it tuned into a lightsaver
ReplyDeleteNO STAR WARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Deleteand had to go on a repuplic ship and get a light saber an kill joy of joysta
Delete.....Jame's son was smarter he destroyed the sword and sheild and turned it into two rings of the gods...
ReplyDeleteand he had to on a republic ship and put the force on mattew...
ReplyDeleteThen he traved to komno to get clones then he and his clone army run to ther ships and ready to bord the bad guys ship
ReplyDeleteNO STARWARS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DeleteThen the ship exploded and cracked the universe and that's how it ended!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletepublished by evryone
ReplyDeletebut not me or henry!
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ReplyDeleteBut then a boy called matthew went to outer space to destroy the sword into a million pieces and that is how the sword got destroyed in the world and then the clones HQ got terminated and the lightsaber was never again seen. THE END!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteuntill now
ReplyDeletei saw it in my bedroom on mars because when you destroyed the earth it came onto mars and landed on my bed where i fownd it and used its full power to turn mars into a big heap of gummy bears and lolypops then an evil vilane came and turned the lollypops into lolypoops untill......
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ReplyDeleteThe Gummybears and lollipops took over mars...
ReplyDelete...and went to take over earth...
ReplyDeletebut there was one person standing in their way and his name was.....
ReplyDeleteJohn, The end
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